Suggestions
Thom Van Dycke
Founder & CEO | Growth Consultant for B2B Firms | Fractional Leadership + Mastermind Groups | Sales • Marketing • Biz Dev Systems | Certified Story Brand Coach
Highlights
There is no lake at Camp Green Lake. There once was a very large lake here, the largest lake in Texas. That was over a hundred years ago. Now it is just a dry, flat wasteland.
There used to be a town of Green Lake as well. The town shriveled and dried up along with the lake, and the people who lived there.
During the summer the daytime temperature hovers around ninety-five degrees in the shade-if you can find any shade. There's not much shade on a big dry lake.
The only trees are two old oaks on the eastern edge of the "lake." A hammock is stretched between the two trees, and a log cabin stands behind that.
The campers are forbidden to lie in the hammock. It belongs to the Warden. The Warden owns the shade.
Thus begins Holes by Louis Sachar, the finest work of teen fiction of the past century.
This excellent introduction opens what we call a "story loop."
A story loop raises questions that need to be answered and keeps the reader engaged.
What happened to the lake? What does the town have to do with what is going on now? Why would campers go there? Why do campers need a warden? Is the Warden mean or good?
My friend Cory Dyck is a primary school teacher and he reads Holes to his class every year, however, he only reads one chapter per day. This is a cruel joke because the first chapter of Holes is only slightly longer than the above paragraph and the story loop drives his students crazy. Which is a favourite pastime of every great teacher.
Now let me introduce you to the "cheater's" story loop.
Exhibit A - After the opening credits of Prime's Jack Ryan Season 4, Episode 1, it reads, "Three Weeks Earlier." This is compelling because just before the opening credits Jack Ryan is hauled into some facility with a hood on.
Ryan is bloodied and shackled and hoisted up for an apparent torture session. But WHY?
"Three Weeks Earlier..."
Now you will have to watch hours of storyline to figure out what happened in these three weeks. I call this a cheater tactic because I find it a bit cheap. There's no poetry to it. No clever intrigue.
Regardless of my feelings about the quality of the Jack Ryan hook, I did take the bait.
What story loop are you opening up for your audience?
A coach or consultant needs to master the "opening scene" - the hook or story-loop. If you don't, chances are subscribers will bounce, leads will ghost you, and business will stall.
Here are a few I've used: A pastor of 19 years starts without any business experience scales to 6 figures in his first year. When was the last time you saw a 100% increase in revenue over just 12 months?
You are not in the business of sales, you are in the business of intrigue and intrigue starts from the first line of the first email you send. From the first impression you make. From the pause before you launch into your keynote.
But story-telling that masters the art of intrigue takes skill.
Do you have those skills?
